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唐韵九期初词班第十一讲梅组作业贴 | 
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问好同学,这首词平仄无误。恋依依感觉意思重复,因为依依就有恋恋不舍的意思。还有归宿期,个人感觉表达的不够明朗,还可以再斟酌。以上个见,如有不当之处请多多包涵 
 
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简评:全词情景交融,上下片承接合理,文路清晰,魂梦何时与尔同?此句建议再斟酌一下。 
 
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